Fuchsia petals stand out against the dark mulched bank
Impatient blossoms growing fuller everyday
A welcoming view when you pull up the drive
New buds ready to expose their beautiful core
Then… an intruder!
The Garden Gobbler bounces softly
Sniff
Nibble
Nibble
A tasty treat
A car appears
The cotton-tailed prowler scrambles aimlessly
Darts into the tall grass
Waiting and watching
Coast is clear
The Garden Gobbler strikes again and again
Fuchsia petals nibbled down to nothing
A full belly
An empty garden
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Kari,
ReplyDeleteJob well done. You have taken an everyday event- such as rabits invading a garden- and turned it into a crime scene. I really enjoyed your powerful adjectives used in this piece of writing. One question, what happened to the culprit?
Thanks for the feedback Matthew. The culprit is still at large. Hard to keep him away.
ReplyDeleteKari,
ReplyDeleteIsn't that frustrating! Good job showing this mischief.
I've been taught to try, as much as I can, to conjure up images in poetry. I tend to include images that are so abstract that people don't know what I'm refering to:)-working on that. But, I'm wondering if you could try doing this with a couple things that happen- how would a garden welcome-maybe use some personification? maybe the car coming, waiting and watching-what do those look/sound/feel like?
Hope that's helpful.